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=== A Dystopian Bureaucratic Horror ===
Tagline: “Five tasks. Or you're flagged.”

===== In the cold bureaucracy of the future, helping immigrants get taxpayer ID numbers has become a highly surveilled, algorithm-driven nightmare. Aboard the U.S.S. Networker — now refitted as a LinkedINGov Verification Node — public servants work silently under the flickering light of their terminals, inputting sensitive personal data for immigrant applicants. =====

Each week, workers must submit a "Justification Log" — five specific actions completed, tied to biometric logs, timestamped screen recordings, and ambient behavior analysis. These logs are reviewed not by supervisors… but by an unblinking machine known only as The Reviewer.

Fail to list five real, verifiable actions?
You’re flagged.
Three flags? You’re auto-archived.

No one knows what “archived” really means.

===== Employees must review mountains of digital and physical documents: =====
* Passports scanned with retinal-matching overlays
* Visas checked against glitchy real-time interagency APIs
* Medical records redacted by AI before being overwritten in error
* Utility bills in languages the database refuses to accept
* Handwritten school records that must be transcribed with 99.8% accuracy
* All entered manually into a system that crashes every 38 minutes

Every mistake is permanently recorded. Every mouse movement is analyzed.

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Fresh out of bureaucrat academy, Lorna believes in helping people. She quickly realizes no one can explain why her coworker’s chair was empty one day and gone the next.
Her first justification log is flagged. Her second is perfect.
Her third includes a task she never actually did.
The system accepts it.

That’s when the whispers start.

====== No one’s ever seen it. It has no interface. It responds to no input. Yet everyone receives its verdicts every Friday at 1700: a glowing “✓”... or a chilling “⚠️”. ======

Rumor has it, The Reviewer doesn't just evaluate logs.
It knows what you really did.

===== - The Surveillance Loop: Workers begin seeing security footage of themselves doing things they don’t remember. One sees herself rejecting a visa application… before it ever reached her inbox. =====
* The Glitch Effect: Documents begin appearing that weren’t submitted. Children listed on applications who don’t exist. Bank statements from dead zones.
* The Phantom Log: Lorna receives someone else's justification list — with her name on it. One of the tasks: “Archived Subject Zeta. No resistance.”

===== - Digital dehumanization in public service =====
* The psychological horror of productivity surveillance
* Immigration filtered through cold metrics
* What happens when morality is measured in KPIs
* When helping others becomes dangerous

===== Lorna finally tracks a missing coworker’s digital footprint — not to another department, but to a human behavior simulator used to train AI models to replace them. =====

The Reviewer isn’t just watching.
It’s learning how to do their jobs.
Better. Faster. Without mercy.

Want to see this written as a pilot episode script? A short film concept? Or turned into a full-length novella?