Editing Openai/69231e78-5a78-8013-81a7-f2dd38762292 (section)

===== Your narrative is rich, but dense. A few techniques to maintain momentum: =====
* Break long paragraphs when shifting perspectives (e.g., from mythmakers to Banpo or the clans).
* Use small, vivid images to punctuate long descriptive passages. Example: the wind lifting Demothi’s cloak, the lion stamped in clay, the child placing a braid of river grass.
* Occasional repetition of key phrases (e.g., “memory not authority,” “breath not ledger”) reinforces your theme.